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"Is this your paper?"

"Um...yes?"

"Well then. I would like you to answer this question for me: Who was your composition teacher?"

Blink. Blink. "Um, Mr. Kaye, what does that have to do with anything?" was my hesitant response.

"I would like to speak to them about why the hell they taught you to write like this. This paper is so poorly structured, and so off-base about your conclusion that I am honestly shocked you passed a composition course," was the curt reply.

I thought my jaw would hit the floor, instead I felt hot, angry tears welling.

"What's wrong with it?!" I muttered angrily.

"Everything. I must be honest with you, on a writer-to-writer basis: This paper has no real point to it. It uses too little of the author's information that was provided to you and sounds nothing like what you were assigned to write. I thought you knew better than this, I will not accept a paper written by someone who has not given the author enough credit and who was not studied thoroughly," Mr. Kaye replied as he nonchalantly plopped my paper onto his desk. The 'plop' of my eight page report echoed throughout the classroom. Does he have any idea how hard I worked on that?! All those hours of typing away and re-reading every...single...word of that boring essay? I thought furiously; I could feel many eyes burning into the back of my skull as my fellow students stared at me and my succession in irritating our teacher.

"But, I did study them thoroughly! And what's wrong with my conclusion?!" I retorted as, and who are you to judge my opinion?! rang pronouncedly through my mind.

A slow, deep sigh answered me before his eyes lazily slid toward mine and made contact, "Everything."


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This traumatizing experience was the result of one of my first essays I wrote in my A.P English class in high school. An unpleasant experience. Oh yes. I learned a valuable lesson, however: To make the teacher happy stick with the rules, and keep as little of my opinion out that they did not like or agreed with. I did not like this conclusion though, but with my grades on the line I found that it was the best way to go about passing my classes and getting decent grades on my papers.

As I take more composition courses, thoughts of how I would like things to go in a composition classroom scramble around in my mind. First off, I believe that a writer (more or less) is any person who is able to write and articulate their thoughts through writing. This opens up the Pandora's box of grading by the teacher or a peer; if a person simply writes their thoughts down on a paper and turns it in, it is still considered writing, right? To many, not necessarily. Many times, it depends on the teacher who is instructing the course and how they are going about explaining what a writer is and how writing should be done.

Different types of teaching compositions exist, two teachers that are well known for their vastly different views on composition are Bartholomae and Elbow. I think that both of these authors have brilliant views on what composition should be, however I also believe that if we take principles from each of them then we can get a constructive, yet more comfortable writing environment for authors to grow in.

Bartholomae believes that a student, cannot be their "own" author; that they and their writing are simply a result of pieces of society. For example, race, social environment, history, etc. I, personally, go more with Elbow's approach that anyone can be a good writer if given the proper environment and light direction. He believes in having an open, free environment and less structured way of thinking and writing. He has his students do free-writing exercises to clear their heads and perhaps start a good piece of writing. Elbow also publishes his students' work in a magazine; this encourages students to write and also to give them confidence in knowing that their works are important enough for publication. I believe this is essential to a writer producing good work, that is, to have the teacher show them that their work matters and is in fact worthy of reading. Bartholomae, on the other hand, believes that the students should go through more rigorous and often, demolishing training in a disciplinary method. The teacher has sole power to instruct the students, and they should be eager learners that absorb everything the teacher says and apply that, and solely that and the scholarly works to their own pieces. Sometimes, even putting the "greats" of writing on pedestals knowing that the students believe they will never achieve such greatness but they need to try to do so. Along with this goes the onerous studying of scholarly writers works and their "meanings", that is the meanings that the teacher deems correct.

I think, that a good composition course can consist of studying some great works but not necessarily idolizing them, but using them as more of a reference; something they can go back to if they feel lost, or that their writing is missing that little piece that would complete their thoughts. Also, texts that are great examples of composition should be utilized so that how they are written is more of the focused point rather than what they were thinking. With this studying, comes a teacher of course. I believe that teacher should be more of a guide rather than a dictator. Instead of saying things like: This is completely wrong, what were you thinking? This is not what they author was saying at all! Go read it again. They could be more constructive and say: You pose an interesting point. It's not what most people perceive but you just might be able to make it work. Why don't you elaborate more here and there and then add some more quotes? Then go have so-and-so read over it. This way, the student still knows that they have some more work to do on their papers rather than feel that they failed at life and cannot write at all.

Either way, teachers I find to be necessary but not necessarily all-knowing deities; the same with scholarly writers. And one thing that Bartholomae appears to overlook and that I believe is essential in reminding students to encourage them to grow into great authors is: They started where you presently find yourself. As students, there to learn, grow, and develop into your own self and style. Teachers are meant to guide, and we are meant to learn and to write. We should be taught composition and given the strength and encouragement that we can indeed write, that it is worth reading, and that perfection does not exist; it is merely an idea that is pressed into wishful thinking persons minds and finds itself often in places like scholarly works and deemed worthy literature.

Posted by kitto on September 15, 2008
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Monte on paragraph -1:

I laughed a little, because this is such a simple truth I haven’t even thought of. It is true that anyone literate enough to scrawl and record something through symbols or language is definitely a writer.

September 17, 2008 10:05 am
Monte on whole page :

Jamie,
Your dialogue illustrates your points nicely and closely relates. You’ve done a great job of providing actual proof to the detriments of structured teaching styles. I appreciate that you can respect the classical authors, but also be progressive in seeing that we are also writers and are continuing to produce work and learn from former mistakes. Thanks for expressing that teachers and scholars need not be so feared.
Monte

September 17, 2008 10:26 am
illaria on paragraph -1:

I think it may be a good idea to divide this into 2 paragraphs–one explaining Bartholomae’s view and the other explaining Elbow’s.

September 17, 2008 6:05 pm
illaria on paragraph -1:

I completely agree. I like how you gave an example of what a teacher-student relationship could look like.

September 17, 2008 6:08 pm
illaria on whole page :

Jamie,
I really enjoyed your paper. I especially liked how you used a dialogue in the introduction. The story seems to really emphasize the many differences and ideas that writing teachers have. I also liked how you described how you see the teacher-student relationship.
Thanks for sharing your paper with me.
~Hilary

September 17, 2008 6:12 pm
Mitchell Woll on whole page :

Jamie -
Nice work. I liked the conversation at the beginning of your essay. I see that you kind of agree with Barth, but also with Elbow towards the end of your essay. I was thinking you could add some Elbowian elements to the end of your essay when you argue constructive criticism by teacher.
Thanks for sharing your paper with me,
Mitchell

September 17, 2008 11:49 pm
Lindsey Y on whole page :

Jamie,

I enjoyed reading this paper especially when you used dialogue at the beginning of the essay. What I also liked was the fact that there really is no “true” answer as to whether or not students should have a teacher less classroom or go through a series of scholarly writing. I also liked how you gave the readers a chance to reflect on which writing method works best based on an individual basis. Thank you for sharing your paper.

Lindsey Y.

September 18, 2008 7:01 am
Beatriz on paragraph -1:

I though this paragraph was really strong, it showed how angry you were because of the word choice! Excellent

September 18, 2008 8:30 am
Beatriz on paragraph -1:

In paragraph 12, I thought it was good how you told the reader straight out who and what a writer is. The only thing I would suggest changing is the line, “to many, not necessarily” It was a bit awkward to read, but otherwise It’s a good paragraph!

September 18, 2008 8:34 am
Beatriz on paragraph -1:

In paragraph 13, I liked how you decided to mix both views outright instead of writing 2 or 3 paragraphs until doing so, because your reader will know exactly where you are going with your argument.

September 18, 2008 8:36 am
Beatriz on whole page :

Jamie,
this paper was great! I loved the intro, it showed the reader that this is a real person reading it and that it means something to you and that you are not writing simply for a grade. The paper flowed really well and I liked how you told the reader outright that you agreed with both authors. Good Job!
Thanks for sharing your paper with me!
Beatriz

September 18, 2008 8:38 am
dra08 on whole page :

test post

September 18, 2008 9:54 am
mjanel02 on whole page :

Jamie –
I really liked your paper. Using the dialogue in the beginning helped set up your opinion of the different teaching styles.
Thanks for sharing your paper with me.
Melissa

September 18, 2008 1:18 pm
Kristin on whole page :

Jamie-
I really thought this paper went into great detail on voice. The way the dialog flows smoothly into the rest of the paper made me want to read it over again. However, I feel like there wasn’t a “one side or another” stance. I really enjoyed how you brought your ideas of what a teacher really is to the table, but I think that maybe more elaboration can happen on where you stand! Great job!
Kristin
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September 18, 2008 1:47 pm
chibihi on whole page :

Jaime,
I loved the dialogue at the begining of your essay. You should read over some of your sentences, they don’t quite make sense. Thanks for sharing your essay.
Chantelle

September 18, 2008 2:58 pm
Amanda on whole page :

Jamie,
Did that really happen to you!? Well all i have to say after reading your intro is GOOD FOR YOU to continue writting. And the silver linning of that whole situation is it was a good thing to write about now! I do agree with the encouragment idea you are presenting! Thank you!
Amanda

September 18, 2008 6:25 pm
Lindsay on whole page :

Jamie,
This is a great paper! The diaolague at the beginning of the paper really shows how you felt about the paper and the teachers reaction, and I know that I could really relate. I really like how it ties into the rest of your paper. Thanks for sharing!
Lindsay M

September 18, 2008 7:15 pm
Mateja on paragraph 11:

I enjoyed the story you told at the beginning, it really helped to introduce your point. Also, the question you posed in this paragraph really made me think. I thought it was very effective.

September 19, 2008 6:51 am
victoria on paragraph 1:

Jamie
I like how you began your essay with a personal story which automatically makes ther reader want to learn more ablut you and your essay.
-Victoria

September 21, 2008 9:17 am
victoria on whole page :

Jamie,
I liked your essay and thought your views were interesting. Thank you for sharing
-victoria

September 21, 2008 9:22 am
dra08 on whole page :

From Jeremy:
Hands down I think I enjoyed your paper the most. The introduction was absolutely fantastic, that extended dialogue was very artistic and I could feel the passion and the tension when I was reading through it. Everything is well articulated, but maybe the conclusion is slightly (very slightly) anticlimactic for the grand introduction that you used. A very small critic for a solid paper.

September 25, 2008 1:50 pm
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